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Friends with Benefits by ~MikaHeartsJade:iconMikaHeartsJade:



Please don't forget
How far our love went
And he we fell apart
Before it got to start
But it was over from the start
Over from the start

Friends with benefits
Is your term for this
It's just what you got in mind
When your hand traces my spine
Over my bare skin
How could we ever win?
This way, I'll never let it go
I'll never let you go

'Cause this is not what I want
Our love is so shallow
I'm abandoning all your spots
'Cause i cant take this as a whole
It's never what I wanted
But you're always who I wanted

Back to the start
What happened to your heart?
So full of jealousy
So full of greed
And empty
So emptying me

Is this what you wanted?
'Cause I can't take it anymore
I'm taking myself back to shore
Back to where we were
You and me forever
You and me were never...
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Author's Comments

Friends with benefits.
I'm open for constructive criticism and critique.
Please DO NOT copy this for anything. This is my work and i do not want other people using it.
Thanks.


-Meeekah!!!

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:iconxsaria:
Definately sounds like song lyrics to me, I don't think I could read it like rythm poetry or somethin' like that.

Also: I loved this.
Make a song for this so it's even awesomer. XD!
:iconmikaheartsjade:
It's a song in the process. xD
It like got a rythm but not music. haha.

Gosh you know who this is about?!?! xD

--
This is my line, this is a turtle.

"We don't wear your Abercrombie, so don't listen to our punk rock." - Mr. Havok himself
:iconamber-ruler5:
Poems don't have to rhyme, you know. And your grammar stinks. :D

The rhythm is good, fast, choppy in an awesome way. Is the song fast? Because that's how the poem reads. Or is it more of a ballad, with the words and pauses dragged out for a long time? When you're done, will you post it? Can you post a song? Hmmm.......

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You just walk in/ I make you smile/
It's cool but/ You don't even know me/
....
Stop right now/ Thank you very much/
I need somebody/ With a human touch/
Hey you/ Always on the run/
Gotta slow it down baby/ Gotta have some fun
~Spice Girls' "Stop"
:iconmikaheartsjade:
The verse is normaler tempo and the bridge gets really fast and builds up to the chorus which is medium. haha i dont think you can post songs on here.

--
This is my line, this is a turtle.

"We don't wear your Abercrombie, so don't listen to our punk rock." - Mr. Havok himself

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